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Post by Anto J Lareneg on Mar 21, 2006 18:11:44 GMT -5
elohel
ITS GONE!!!!!!!!1
Yey. Enjoy.
PS: Feel free to critique the writing style. BX
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Post by A.G. Markov on Apr 13, 2006 22:04:35 GMT -5
I remember this story. Its one of my fav stories that youve written ( though I remember liking another one and it was either Sarien's or Vhoyt's, Im pretty sure it was Sarien's) and the last conversation bewteen Zigit and Ziddy is still my fav part of the while thing. XD
Writing style. Uh. I saw nothing wrong with it aside from when you dialog line right after the other (more than thrice) it can sometimes get confusing (to those who would be un famillure with the characters) whos saying what. And thats just my 2 cents.
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Post by Anto J Lareneg on Apr 14, 2006 0:23:34 GMT -5
when the dialouge between two characters goes back and forth like so without the "SAID SO AND SO" it usually means they are switching off.
Like this
Person1: oshdbjs
person2: iwfhen
person1: snwd
person2: dwnfd
because it gets boring and redundant to have "SAID STUPIDHEAD" on the end of every line of dialouge. :S
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Post by A.G. Markov on Apr 14, 2006 4:10:07 GMT -5
Well you dont need it on the end of EVERY line.
Maybe its just me then. Cause that does make sense.
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Post by Anto J Lareneg on Apr 14, 2006 16:11:15 GMT -5
And really. I have seen some books that dont put "said __" on the end of dialouge between THREE people. Now THAT is some confusin pizza. D:
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Post by A.G. Markov on Apr 16, 2006 3:50:22 GMT -5
Yeah that would get wow XDD;; Youd really have to be in tune with the story. But it was just a suggestion, you dont have to give two shits what I say. Lmao.
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