The Story of Vhoyt Keauk

[Anto J Lareneg]

I know this is an old story, but I changed some of the dialouge from the 2003 version because it was simply retarded. >_<

Also feel free to critique any of my stories, I know my writing skills aren't the best.

ITS GONE!!!!!11

All of these stories will also be located on my Dimensia website, but for now I feel like posting them here. BX

[A.G. Markov]

You know what, I havnt nothing to say as far as the writing style cause I saw no errors to my eye.

and you know what? I dont remember ever reading this before now. *feels ashamed* or if I did I really dont remember, but youd think I would.

And forgive me, given the current time and where Vhoyt is now, the ending makes me giggle. XD

[Anto J Lareneg]

YOUR FACE MAKES ME GIGGLE.

But on all serious-ness how can this be better than my Zigit story?? XDDD I wrote this one two years before the Zigit one.

[A.G. Markov]

Uhm probably the nature. Its not as graphic. ;~; You know how my mind works with stuff like that.

[Julie Xane Indi]

HARHAR yea you changed some Sarien dialouge. (: That makes Potato happy. . . . yea.

I think the revised version is better. Lololz.

I need to re-write my Alecks story. DX Xorofd does not belong.

[Anto J Lareneg]

]:< YOUR FACE DOES NOT BELONG!

and to AG: omfggg. Stop being bias. ]: omglol.

[A.G. Markov]

Im not bias o0; Im not at all. If I were Id like Zigit's story better Im sure. ;; Its just the content can be bit much for my stomach is all. I cant help that. You know I wish more than anything I could- it would solve SO many problems for me if I wasnt like this. . . ;~;

Its not that the Vhoyt story has a better style, yes the Zigit one had improved alot, it was just the content. *sigh* Sorry if that was mis understood somewhere.

[Anto J Lareneg]

No I meant content bias. :b